A12 - A17 shopping

 

I started to use thicker lines from this page. Also keep in mind how tall/short they looked compared to each other here.

Ah Pompo chan's eyes look rather uncanny when they're fully open.

Oh I tried some experiments here.

a) panels are devided by characters instead of frames. (Not done well on this page)

b) clouds are used like speech bubbles. (A tad confusing because conventionally cloudy speech bubbles are used to show characters' inner voices.)

c) thick thick lines (I LOVE THEM!)

Also the sun having eyes if that counts.

Yeah so I told you about this before. It's like a magic trick and not some real wizardry.

Oh those 2 pages where they're shopping together... I don't like them.

Characters look so off-model.

The pacing is really bad too... Why? Because emotional scene should take more time/pages.

I believe this pacing issue will be there for a while... I started to draw first instead of writing scripts first. So some pages have too many words while others feel rather... quiet?

Now I should address what Mumu's saying there...

He doesn't lack empathy completely, but he couldn't feel it towards Pompo chan for many reasons. Well, mainly because he can't trust any adults.

Idk if I depicted that well, man. But I hope my explanation would help.

Ah yeah lastly, Mumu's highlight in eyes can change its shape depending on the level of his discomfort. As I said earlier, he never fully trusts any adults. So the circles are never truly filled and instead look like compressed spaghetti.

I wasn't motivated enough to drawt his page... But they both look cute here. I love them.